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The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. d0ar
The chart below illustrates how many people went to movies in a country in Europe during the week. Overall, It is clear from the graph that on saturday most people likely to go to cinemas over the period. However, on friday, the figure maintained steady. In 2003, At the beginning of the week, it is noticied the low percentage which is 10, whereas it is figure doubled sharplyon the following day with percentage of 20. After that, it is identified a significant fall in the number where it slipped to 15%. In contrast to the latter day, There is considerable change in the numbers with a growth of about 7% and it managed the numbers steadily till the weekend. In 2005, It is reported that on saturday, where it noticed the highest pecentage of the figure, 45%, while the others days maintained marginal increase during the year. In 2007, Although it has a slight change in numbers, but it rised sharply during the weekend with about 17%, 30%, 40% from thursday to saturday respectively, whereas there was a consderable decrease in the last day of the week.
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went to movies in a country in Europe during the week.

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from the graph that on
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most
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likely to go to cinemas over the period.
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, the figure maintained steady.

In 2003, At the beginning of the week, it is
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the low percentage which is 10, whereas it is figure doubled
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the following day with percentage of 20. After that, it
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a significant fall in the
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where it slipped to 15%.
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latter day
, There is considerable
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in the
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with a growth of about 7% and it managed the
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steadily
till the weekend.

In 2005, It
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that on
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saturday
, where it noticed the highest
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of the figure, 45%, while the others days maintained marginal increase during the year.
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2007, Although it has a slight
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

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