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The three pie charts below describe the breakdown of costs at a Canadian University in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information in the charts and make comparisons where appropriate.

The three pie charts below describe the breakdown of costs at a Canadian University in 2000, 2005 and 2010. 6x9W3
The chart shows about the Canadian university various spending in 2000, 2005 & 2010. Academic salaries are a major part of expenditure for all the three years which if of a percentage of 39, 49 & 44 for 2000, 2005 & 2010 academic year, in the year 2005 it went 5% above than 2000, again the same 5% got decreased for 2010 year. When it comes to Technical & admin salaries the trend is downward from 2000 – 2010, which reduced from 29% to 23% in 2010 & and in 2010 it was just 16% of the total cost for 2010. While buying an equipment the cost 16% in 2000, it declined to 7% in 2005 again the cost increased to 14% in 2010, whereas consumables the percentage is 16, 17 & 18 percentage for 2000, 2005 & 2010 year, respectively. The last expenditure is towards the Insurance which is 2% for 2000, 4% for 2005 & 8% for 2010 which is in increasing trend. The overall expenditure for the university is more or less similar with related to all the expenses with slight upward or downward trend in each segment.
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about the Canadian university various spending in 2000, 2005 & 2010.

Academic salaries are a major part of expenditure for all the three years which
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of a percentage of 39, 49 & 44 for 2000, 2005 & 2010 academic
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2005 it went 5%
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than 2000, again the same 5%
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decreased for 2010
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to Technical & admin salaries the trend is downward
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from 2000 – 2010
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from 29% to 23% in 2010 & and in 2010 it was
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16% of the total cost for 2010.

While buying an equipment the cost 16% in 2000, it declined to 7% in 2005 again the cost increased to 14% in 2010, whereas consumables the percentage is 16, 17 & 18 percentage for 2000, 2005 & 2010
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. The last expenditure is towards the Insurance which is 2% for 2000, 4% for 2005 & 8% for 2010 which is in increasing trend.

The
overall
expenditure for the university is more or less similar with related to all the expenses with slight upward or downward trend in each segment.
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IELTS academic The three pie charts below describe the breakdown of costs at a Canadian University in 2000, 2005 and 2010.

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