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The three bar chart compares the percentage of British people spending on three kinds of music albums, namely Pop, Rock and classical music with respect aged and sex.

The three bar chart compares the percentage of British people spending on three kinds of music albums, namely Pop, Rock and classical music with respect aged and sex. ENk3B
The three bar chart compares the percentage of British people spending on three kinds of music albums, namely Pop, Rock and classical music with respect aged and sex. It can be seen from the graph Classicial music was least popular type among all types of categories. The proportion of Rock Music which was bought by men was highest (around 31%), compared to that of the data for second highest in Pop Music (about 28%) and the third highest in Clasical Music (nearly 10%). By contrast, the percentage of women much lower than the figure for men, at roughly 19% in Pop Music, 15% in Rock Music and 5% in Classical Music respectively. However, there were 30% and 31% in the proportions of people aged 16 to 24 purchased Pop Music and Rock Music, which was higher than the statistic for Classical Music stood at 1%. Notably, the percentage of people from 25 to 34 years old who buy Classical Music being at 15%, while the data for Pop Music and Rock Music were higher, at approximately 31% and 29% consecutively. Meanwhile, the proportions of people 35-to-44-year-olds purchased Rock Music and Pop Music were equal, at around 18%, in comparison with the statistic for Classical Music standing at 2%. In the interim, there was 10% in the percentage of elderly people over 45 years old who buy Rock Music, which was lower than the data for Classical Music (about 20%) and higher than that of Rock Music (nearly 5%).
The three bar chart compares the
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of British
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people
spending on three kinds of
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music
albums,
namely
Pop,
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Rock
and
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classical
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music
with respect aged and sex. It can be
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seen
from the graph
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Classicial
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music
was
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least
popular type among all types of categories.

The proportion of
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Rock
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Music
which was
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bought
by
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men
was highest (around 31%), compared to that of the data for second highest in Pop
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Music
(about 28%) and the third highest in
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Clasical
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Music
(
nearly
10%). By contrast, the
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percentage
of women much lower than the figure for
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men
, at roughly 19% in Pop
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Music
, 15% in
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Rock
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Music
and 5% in
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Classical
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Music
respectively
.
However
, there were 30% and 31% in the proportions of
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people
aged 16 to 24
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purchased
Pop
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Music
and
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Rock
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Music
, which was higher than the statistic for
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Classical
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Music
stood at 1%.

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, the
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percentage
of
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people
from 25 to 34 years
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old
who
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buy
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Classical
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Music
being at 15%, while the data for Pop
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Music
and
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Rock
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Music
were higher, at approximately 31% and 29%
consecutively
. Meanwhile, the proportions of
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people
35-to-44-year-olds
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purchased
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Rock
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Music
and Pop
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Music
were equal, at around 18%,
in comparison
with the statistic for
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Classical
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Music
standing at 2%. In the interim, there was 10% in the
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percentage
of elderly
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people
over 45 years
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old
who
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buy
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Rock
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Music
, which was lower than the data for
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Classical
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Music
(about 20%) and higher than that of
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Rock
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Music
(
nearly
5%).
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IELTS academic The three bar chart compares the percentage of British people spending on three kinds of music albums, namely Pop, Rock and classical music with respect aged and sex.

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