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The tavle below gives information about bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015

The tavle below gives information about bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015 NRNy
It can be observed that sales of London Covent garden were in the first place and in the second place were sales of London oxford Circus. It is clear that in 2015 the number of transactions in London Covent garden accounted for approximately 640, but in London oxford Circus it made up about 540. The transaction value of London Covent garden was high than other branches it accounted for about £8. 00 but the London oxford Circus’s transaction value was £3 low then London Covent garden. The number of transactions of London St John’s wood made up about 300, and transaction value was £1 high than London oxford Circus. The numbers of eat-in transactions were 304 in London Covent garden, 247 in London oxford Circus and 150 in London St John’s wood. The numbers of take-away transactions of London St John’s wood were 119, 291 in London Oxford Circus and 340 in London Covent Garden. Most popular items of London Covent Garden were Croissant, medium latte in London Oxford Circus and strawberry tart in London St John’s wood.
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that sales of London
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were in the
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place and in the second place were sales of London
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oxford
Circus.

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that in 2015 the
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of
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transactions
in London
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garden
accounted for approximately 640,
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in London
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oxford
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Circus
it made up about 540. The
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transaction
value of London
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Covent
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garden
was
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than other branches it accounted for about £8. 00
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the London
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oxford
Circus’s
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value was £3 low then London
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garden.

The
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of
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transactions
of London St John’s
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wood
made up about 300, and
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transaction
value was £1
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high
than London
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oxford
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Circus
. The
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numbers
of eat-in
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transactions
were 304 in London
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garden
, 247 in London
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and 150 in London St John’s
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of take-away
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transactions
of London St John’s
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wood
were 119, 291 in London
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Oxford
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Circus
and 340 in London
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Garden
. Most popular items of London
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were Croissant, medium latte in London
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Oxford
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Circus
and strawberry tart in London St John’s
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IELTS academic The tavle below gives information about bakery's average sales in three different branches in 2015

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178 words
6.0
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