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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

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The table explains the information regarding the percentage of student's attendance in different types of secondary high schools during the period of 2000, 2005and 2009. In the year of 2000, it is evident from the detail that a significant proportion of pupils attended Voluntary controlled schools which was more than 50%. In the next four years, a dramatic declined trend noted in this academic class where number plummeted by 32%. similarly, in terms of Grammar schools although 24% of learners attended this class in 2000, this was reduced drastically in 2005 and 2009 and reached to 12%. Also, for Specialist schools attendance of pupils dropped slightly in 2009 as compared with 2000. However, number of attendance only soared in case of Community schools. To begin it accounted for 12% then, in the next five years percentage was tripled than 2000 and in the end of time-line it stood at 58%. Overall, it can be inferred form the data that Proportions of Pupils Attending classes was reduced in all academic classes except Community schools in this number was surged trough out the period.
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types of secondary high
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during the period of 2000, 2005and 2009.

In the year of 2000, it is evident from the detail that a significant proportion of pupils attended Voluntary controlled
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schools
which was more than 50%. In the
next
four years, a dramatic declined trend noted in this academic
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class
where number plummeted by 32%.
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schools
although 24% of learners attended this
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class
in 2000, this was
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reduced
drastically
in 2005 and 2009 and reached to 12%.
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schools
attendance of pupils dropped
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in 2009 as compared with 2000.

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only
soared in case of Community
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schools
. To
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it accounted for 12% then, in the
next
five years percentage
was tripled
than 2000 and in the
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end
of time-line it stood at 58%.

Overall
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form the data that Proportions of Pupils Attending
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classes
was
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reduced
in all academic
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classes
except Community
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schools
in this number
was surged
trough out the period.
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