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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. 3O2d
The given four pie charts depicts that the change of tourism in two nations for 1960 and 2010. All the data is calibrated in percentage. From an overall perspective, it can be seen that the maximum number of tourists from Europe visited both nations, Australia and Germany, in the year 1960 at 50% and 45% respectively. Britain was the second highest country, who visited Australia in the 1960, at 25%, same number of tourists from USA visited Germany. In the year 2010, Aisa had the highest number of tourist to visit Australia at 63% and in the Germany at 25%. In the Germany, the visitors from Europe remained same with slightly decreased at 40%. The huge dropped was noticed in the tourists of britain to visit Germany merely 6%. To cap it all, it is crystal clear that the tourists from Asia was increased dramatically for visit Australia over the period
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four pie charts depicts that the
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change
of tourism in two nations for 1960 and 2010. All the data
is calibrated
in percentage.

From an
overall
perspective, it can be
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seen
that the maximum number of
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tourists
from Europe visited both nations, Australia and Germany, in the year 1960 at 50% and 45%
respectively
. Britain was the second highest country, who visited Australia in the 1960, at 25%, same number of
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tourists
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from USA
visited Germany.

In the year 2010,
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Aisa
had the highest number of
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tourist
to visit Australia at 63% and in the Germany at 25%. In the Germany, the visitors from Europe remained same with
slightly
decreased at 40%. The huge dropped
was noticed
in the
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tourists
of
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britain
to visit Germany
merely
6%.

To cap it all, it is crystal
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clear
that the
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tourists
from Asia
was increased
dramatically
for visit Australia over the period
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IELTS academic The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

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