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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The above table illustrates the number of working staff including both male and female and the number of companies in England and Wales in the period between 1851 to 1901 It can be observed that though the number of factories are increasing, there has been a drastic decrease in the number of employees. a major fall in the number of male working force has occured. In the year 1857 the employees to factory ratio was too higher with a work force of 477, 100 people consisting of 287100 males and 190000 females, wheeas the number of factories was limited to 225. But as the years proceeded the number of employees fell down to 61000 while the factories tend to increase its numbers to 600 in the year 1901. A consistance rise in the number of factories was observed till 1881 but the number dropped down by almost 100 in the following year. whereas a steady fall int the number of employees was observed.
The above table illustrates the
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of working staff including both male and female and the
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of
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companies
in England and Wales in the period
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between 1851 to 1901


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be observed
that though the
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number
of
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factories
are increasing, there has been a drastic decrease in the
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number
of
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employees
.
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a
major fall in the
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number
of male working force has
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occured
.

In the
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year
1857 the
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employees
to
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factory
ratio was too higher with a work force of 477, 100
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people
consisting of 287100 males and 190000 females,
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wheeas
the
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number
of
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factories
was limited
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But
as the years proceeded the
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number
of
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employees
fell down to 61000 while the
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factories
tend to increase its
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numbers
to 600 in the
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year
1901.

A
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consistance
rise in the
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number
of
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factories
was observed
till 1881
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but
the
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number
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dropped down
by almost 100 in the following
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year
.
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whereas
a steady fall int the
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number
of
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employees
was observed
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IELTS academic The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

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163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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