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the table and graph below give information ablout the gross domestic product (GDP) and employment sectors of a developing country. Distribution of employment bye sector and GDP,2004.

the table and graph below give information ablout the gross domestic product (GDP) and employment sectors of a developing country. Distribution of employment bye sector and GDP, 2004. rL5Lm
The table and line graph illustrate the percentage distribution in different sectors of employment and GDP and the percentage distribution of different sectors of GDP, observed in the year 2004 and over the period of a decade respectively. Overview, services were the biggest contributor in GDP, and workers in natural resources accounted for the majority of the labor force of a developing nation. Services (trade, restaurants, hotels, transport, communication, government) contributed significantly more to GDP than others, despite declining steadily from above 60% in 1998 to just under 60% in 2007. in 2004, services also made up 58% of GDP, but comprised only 15. 2% of the workforce.
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sectors of employment and GDP and the percentage distribution of
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different
sectors of GDP, observed in the year 2004 and over the period of a decade
respectively
. Overview, services were the biggest contributor in GDP, and workers in natural resources accounted for the majority of the labor force of a developing nation. Services (trade, restaurants, hotels, transport, communication,
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more to GDP than others, despite declining
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from above 60% in 1998 to
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under 60% in 2007.
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15. 2% of the workforce.
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IELTS academic the table and graph below give information ablout the gross domestic product (GDP) and employment sectors of a developing country. Distribution of employment bye sector and GDP, 2004.

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