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The supplied diagram highlights the steps involved in manufacturing recycled glass bottles.

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The supplied diagram highlights the steps involved in manufacturing recycled glass bottles. This is a man- made linear process that starts with collecting wasted bottles and ends with selling cycled bottles in the supermarket. There are three main stages including ten specific stages in the process of recycling wasted bottles. First of all, the wasted glass bottles are collected then delivered. After that, they put these wasted bottles under high- pressure water then clear, dye green and brown them. Following this, the glass bottles are transformed to the glass factory where they are broken into tiny pieces and burned in furnace from 600 C to 800 C until they turn into liquid. Once this recycled liquid has been mixed with a new liquid glass, the mixture is then filled and shaped in glass mould. Subsequently, the new bottles are delivered to the supermarket. Finally, the recycled bottles are sold in the supermarket.
The supplied diagram highlights the steps involved in manufacturing recycled
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glass
bottles.

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man
- made linear process that
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starts
with collecting wasted
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bottles
and ends with selling cycled
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bottles
in the supermarket. There are three main stages including ten specific stages in the process of recycling wasted bottles.

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First of all
, the wasted
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glass
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bottles
are collected
then delivered. After that, they put these wasted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bottles
under high- pressure water then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
, dye green and brown them. Following this, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
glass
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bottles
are transformed
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
glass
factory where they
are broken
into tiny pieces and burned in furnace from 600 C to 800 C until they turn into liquid. Once this recycled liquid has
been mixed
with a new liquid
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glass
, the mixture is then filled and shaped in
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glass
Possible spelling mistake. 'mould' is British English.
mould
.
Subsequently
, the new
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bottles
are delivered
to the supermarket.
Finally
, the recycled
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bottles
are sold
in the supermarket.
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