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The shown pie charts depict the difference in yearly spending by an individual institute of the UK institute in the years 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The shown pie charts depict the difference in yearly spending by an individual institute of the UK institute in the years 1981, 1991 and 2001. xgqdQ
The shown pie charts depict the difference in yearly spending by an individual institute of the UK institute in the years 1981, 1991 and 2001. Overall the most schools paid to educators with a large number in all respective years less. However, the proportion of annual spending by the schools on insurance is very less, yet gradually increasing by 2001. In 1981 and 1991 if percentages observe of pie chart most paid out on teachers’ salaries of schools in 1981 it was 40% and in 1991 it was almost half in comparison to others. Moreover the changes in other workers’(28%), resources spending is almost 5% respectively both year 1981 and 1991 likewise the difference in proportions of furniture and equipment of both year is 10%. If pie chart of 2001 compared with given past two years immense difference in spending can be noticed in furniture and equipment, as well as, in other workers’ salaries about 7-13% respectively. On the other hand, there is no difference in other percentages in spending.
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spending
by an individual institute of the UK institute in the years 1981, 1991 and 2001.

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However
, the proportion of annual
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spending
by the schools on insurance is
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less,
yet
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increasing by 2001.

In 1981 and 1991 if percentages observe of pie chart most paid out on teachers’ salaries of schools in 1981 it was 40% and in 1991 it was almost half
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workers’(28%), resources
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spending
is almost 5%
respectively
both
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year
1981 and 1991
likewise
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in proportions of furniture and equipment of both
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year
is 10%.

If pie chart of 2001 compared with
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past two years immense
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in furniture and equipment,
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as, in
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workers’ salaries about 7-13%
respectively
. On the
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hand, there is no
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in
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.

IELTS academic The shown pie charts depict the difference in yearly spending by an individual institute of the UK institute in the years 1981, 1991 and 2001.

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