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The provided two maps above illustrate how semi-industrialized village which is called Stamdorf was changed from 1985 to 2016, over a period of 30 years.

The provided two maps above illustrate how semi-industrialized village which is called Stamdorf was changed from 1985 to 2016, over a period of 30 years. R2arV
The provided two maps above illustrate how semi-industrialized village which is called Stamdorf was changed from 1985 to 2016, over a period of 30 years. It is observed that this village witnessed some dramatic changes during the given years and it was significantly transformed from a small rural place into a large urban area. The most notable change is that the simple factory relocated to the northern side and modernized with special machines. In response to the considerable increase in population, housing apartments were built in two locations including the western and southern part of the town. Apart from this, the wooden bridge, which is crossed the Thames River, was renovated into the steel one to provide safety. Whilst the field remained unchanged as a village amenity, the small roadside inns that can be seen to the north-west of the bridge in 1985 replaced with pine trees and then moved beside the northern part of the second housing estate. Thus, there was a new road passing towards a new factory.
The provided two maps above illustrate how semi-industrialized village which
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Stamdorf
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changed
from 1985 to 2016, over a period of 30 years. It
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some
dramatic
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changes
during the
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given
years and it was
significantly
transformed from a
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small
rural place into a large urban area.

The most notable
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change
is that the simple factory relocated to the northern side and modernized with special machines. In response to the considerable increase in population, housing apartments
were built
in two locations including the western and southern part of the town. Apart from this, the wooden bridge, which
is crossed
the Thames River,
was renovated
into the steel one to provide safety.

Whilst the field remained unchanged as a village amenity, the
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small
roadside inns that can be
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seen
to the north-west of the bridge in 1985 replaced with pine trees and then
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moved
beside the northern part of the second housing estate.
Thus
, there was a new road passing towards a new factory.

IELTS academic The provided two maps above illustrate how semi-industrialized village which is called Stamdorf was changed from 1985 to 2016, over a period of 30 years.

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