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The provided line chart delineate the information about the alteration in the case of birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.

The provided line chart delineate the information about the alteration in the case of birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. l9aJ
The provided line chart delineate the information about the alteration in the case of birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. Overall, it is clearly seen from the chart, maximum number of birth rates were found in 1961, whereas maximum rates of death will be showed in 2061It is Crystal clear from the chart, there was 20000 new birth cases were found in 1901. Then, it was slowly inclined and stagnated at approximately 28000 in 1971. Apart from this, it was followed a zigzag trend from 1941 to 2001. In addition to this, In 2021 about 50 thousand kids is born Moreover, it will be estimated that, it will be decline in future and reached at almost 40000 till 2101. Moving further, in the case of birth rates, there was about 10000 individuals were died in 1901. Afterthat, fluctuation Were  showed till 2001. Plus, it is estimated that, it will be followed upward trend from 2021 to 2101.
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birth
and death
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in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
, it is
clearly
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seen
from the chart, maximum number of
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birth
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rates
were found
in 1961, whereas maximum
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rates
of death will be
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showed
in 2061It is Crystal
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clear
from the chart, there was 20000 new
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birth
cases
were found
in 1901. Then, it was
slowly
inclined and stagnated at approximately 28000 in 1971. Apart from this, it
was followed
a zigzag trend from 1941 to 2001.
In addition
to this, In 2021 about 50 thousand kids
is born
Moreover
, it will
be estimated
that, it will be decline in future and reached at almost 40000 till 2101. Moving
further
, in the case of
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birth
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rates
, there was about 10000 individuals were
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died
in 1901.
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Afterthat
, fluctuation Were
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showed
till 2001. Plus, it
is estimated
that, it will
be followed
upward trend from 2021 to 2101.
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IELTS academic The provided line chart delineate the information about the alteration in the case of birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.

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