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The provided charts depict one government’s investment in specific types of art in 1995 and 2005, as well as how many participants of art-related events there were in said years.

The provided charts depict one government’s investment in specific types of art in 1995 and 2005, as well as how many participants of art-related events there were in said years. 1oGOL
The provided charts depict one government’s investment in specific types of art in 1995 and 2005, as well as how many participants of art-related events there were in said years. Overall, there was a slight change in how the government handled these 4 forms of art within a 10-year period. In particular, the pie chart in 1995 indicated a focus on music and visual arts, while that in 2005 showed more balanced spending. Meanwhile, the number of art enjoyers in 2005 was usually larger than that in 1995. Observing closely the pie chart in 1995, it is clear that both music and visual arts were prioritized to the point where their total proportion overtook that of theater and literature. However, after 10 years, the government spread their expenditure to all sectors as music and theater were equally invested; the same can be said for the remaining two, though their sum was less than that of the aforementioned sectors. It is worth mentioning that the focus on music and visual arts were somewhat distributed to literature and theater respectively. As for the column chart, literature was apparently the most popular genre among the public with over 120000 eventgoers in 1995 (the figure soared up to roughly 157500 in 2005). Following behind was the theater sector whose data gained more than 10000 and ended up with above 80000 in 2005. Visual arts were in third place, though they actually witnessed a minor decrease after 10 years rather than an increase like other sectors. Finally, despite the rise to beneath 30000 people in 2005, music remained the least favorite archetype.
The provided
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depict one
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’s investment in specific types of
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art
in 1995 and 2005,
as well
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participants of art-related
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there were in said years.

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change
in how the
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government
handled these 4 forms of
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art
within a 10-year period.
In particular
, the pie
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chart
in 1995 indicated a focus on
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music
and visual
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arts
, while that in 2005
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showed
more balanced spending. Meanwhile, the number of
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art
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enjoyers
in 2005 was
usually
larger than that in 1995.

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closely
the pie
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in 1995, it is
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clear
that both
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music
and visual
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arts
were prioritized
to the point where their total proportion overtook that of
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theater
and literature.
However
, after 10 years, the
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spread their expenditure to all
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sectors
as
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music
and
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theater
were
equally
invested; the same can
be said
for the remaining two, though their sum was less than that of the aforementioned
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sectors
. It is worth mentioning that the focus on
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music
and visual
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arts
were somewhat distributed to literature and
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theater
respectively
.

As for the column
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, literature was
apparently
the most popular genre among the public with over 120000
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eventgoers
in 1995 (the figure soared up to roughly 157500 in 2005). Following behind was the
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theater
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sector
whose data gained more than 10000 and ended up with above 80000 in 2005. Visual
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arts
were in third place, though they actually witnessed a minor decrease after 10 years
rather
than an increase like other
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sectors
.
Finally
, despite the rise to beneath 30000
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people
in 2005,
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music
remained the least favorite archetype.
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IELTS academic The provided charts depict one government’s investment in specific types of art in 1995 and 2005, as well as how many participants of art-related events there were in said years.

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