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The process of making the pears

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The table introduces the process of making the pear canned food. Overall, it exists from several stages and beginning from collecting the fruits and finishing with selling it in stores. To start with, harvest of pears is transferred to one certain place so then in order to clean them. Next is checking the quality, when workers leave good fruits but throw away the spoiled pears. Afterwards, fruits are holding in one room and then people estimate the weight of pears and grading them. On the next step, pears are cleaned and sliced in order to remove the peel that covers the fruit. Then pears are coring to two pieces and putting into the big containers that's canning it. The machine is sealed and crushed the pears. Subsequently, after the mass have cooked and sterilised, they have put into the tin that is labelling with small piece of paper. Finally, the tins are taken to the storage so after it is despatched to the stores and markets.
The table introduces the process of making the pear canned food.
Overall
, it exists from several stages and beginning from collecting the
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fruits
and finishing with selling it in stores.

To
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start
with, harvest of pears
is transferred
to one certain place
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so
then in order to clean them.
Next
is checking the quality, when workers
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leave
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good
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fruits
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but
throw away the spoiled pears. Afterwards,
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fruits
are holding in one room and then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
estimate the weight of pears and grading them. On the
next
step, pears
are cleaned
and sliced in order to remove the peel that covers the
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fruit
. Then pears are coring to two pieces and putting into the
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big
containers that's canning it. The machine
is sealed
and crushed the pears.
Subsequently
, after the mass have cooked and
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sterilised
, they have put into the tin
that is
labelling with
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small
piece of paper.

Finally
, the tins
are taken
to the storage
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
after it
is despatched
to the stores and markets.

IELTS academic The process of making the pears

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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