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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.b

The pie graphs illustrates the survey of consequence of adolescents movements which broadcast proportional of boys and girls involvement in the cultural and free time hobbies. overall, male and female both are interested in listening to music at the ratio of 10%. Girls are more in reading at 21% but boys are less in reading at 2% respectively. Again computer games are more popular in boys than girls by 34% and 16% respectively. Comparing the boys and girls, we found boys liked to play basketball and soccer by 26% and 17% but girls hobbies are dancing and netball by 27% and 15%. well, skateboarding and gymnastics are at the equall proportional of boys and girls are equal by 10% respectively.
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IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. b

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