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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. 0Ap13
The four pie charts compare the electricity generated between Germany and France during 2009, and it is measured in billions kWh. Overall, it can be seen that conventional thermal was the main source of electricity in Germany, whereas nuclear was the main source in France. The bulk of electricity in Germany, whose total output was 560 billion kWh, came from conventional thermal, at 59. 6%. In France, the total output was lower, at 510 billion kWh, and in contrast to Germany, conventional thermal accounted for just 10. 3%, with most electricity coming from nuclear power (76%). In Germany, the proportion of nuclear power generated electricity was only one fifth of the total. Moving on to renewables, this accounted for quite similar proportions for both countries, at approximately 15% of the total electricity generated. In detail, in Germany, most of the renewables consisted of wind and biomass, totaling around 75%, which was far higher than for hydroelectric (17. 7%) and solar (6. 1%). The situation was very different in France, where hydroelectric made up 80. 5% of renewable electricity, with biomass, wind and solar making up the remaining 20%.
The four pie charts compare the
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generated between Germany and France during 2009,

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that conventional thermal was the main

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source
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in Germany, whereas nuclear was the main source in France.

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in Germany, whose total output was 560 billion kWh, came from

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conventional
thermal, at 59. 6%. In France, the total output was lower, at 510 billion kWh, and
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in


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contrast
to Germany, conventional thermal accounted for
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10. 3%, with most
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coming

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from
nuclear power (76%). In Germany, the proportion of nuclear power generated
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was


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only
one fifth of the total.

Moving on to renewables, this accounted for quite similar proportions for both countries, at

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approximately
15% of the total
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generated. In detail, in Germany, most of the
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renewables


consisted of wind and biomass, totaling around 75%, which was far higher than for hydroelectric

(17. 7%) and solar (6. 1%). The situation was
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in France, where hydroelectric made
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up


80. 5% of renewable
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, with biomass, wind and solar making up the remaining 20%.
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

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