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The pie charts show the distribution of visitors to 4 different types of tourist attractions in the UK in two years.

The pie charts show the distribution of visitors to 4 different types of tourist attractions in the UK in two years. rbee6
The pie charts represent the distribution of tourists visiting wildlife parks and zoos, museums and galleries, theme parks and historic houses and monuments in the UK in 1981 and 1999. The data is calibrated in percentage. Overall, it is evident from the graph that, the majority of UK's civilians were interested to museums and galleries. While, the least proportion calculated on wildlife parks and zoos in both years. To begin with, during the year 1981, nearly half of 29. 1 million travellers visited museum and galleries. However, in 1999, the number of total visitors increased to 41. 5 million and among 38% of people went to museums and galleries. In contrast, about one third people keen to visit theme parks in 1981, interestingly, this figure hiked to 37% in 1999. Furthermore, the percentage of visitors who travel historic houses and monuments were the same in both consecutive years. Lastly, it is intersting to notice that, wildlife parks and zoo's tourists were more than doubled 4% in 1981 to 9% in 1999.
The pie charts represent the distribution of tourists visiting wildlife
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parks
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museums
and
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galleries
, theme
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parks
and historic
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houses
and monuments in the UK in 1981 and 1999. The data
is calibrated
in percentage.

Overall
, it is evident from the graph that, the majority of UK's civilians
were interested
to
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museums
and
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galleries
. While, the least proportion calculated on wildlife
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parks
and zoos in both years.

To
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begin
with, during the year 1981,
nearly
half of 29. 1 million
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travellers
visited
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museum
and
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galleries
.
However
, in 1999, the number of total visitors increased to 41. 5 million and among 38% of
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people
went to
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museums
and
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galleries
.
In contrast
, about one third
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people
keen to visit theme
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parks
in 1981,
interestingly
, this figure hiked to 37% in 1999.

Furthermore
, the percentage of visitors who travel historic
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houses
and monuments were the same in both consecutive years.
Lastly
, it is
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intersting
to notice that, wildlife
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parks
and zoo's tourists were more than doubled 4% in 1981 to 9% in 1999.

IELTS academic The pie charts show the distribution of visitors to 4 different types of tourist attractions in the UK in two years.

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