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The pie charts provide a breakdown of means by which music was purchased in 2005, 2008 and 2011 in Northern Ireland. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts provide a breakdown of means by which music was purchased in 2005, 2008 and 2011 in Northern Ireland. jdpqy

Three pie charts illustrate how money spent on music between 2005 to 2008 and 2011 in Northern Ireland. Overall, in the first two years CD sales took the biggest part, but in the end of the year, people spent the most for digital downloads Turning to the details, at 61% we can see that CDs sector accounted for huge of money spend in 2005, but this percentage fell in2008and 2011 (43% and 26%) respectively. By contrast, during the same three years period, invests of digital downloads went from just 6% to 43%, making it the music sector with largest overall proportion of the sales in 2011. In 2005, concert spending in Northern Ireland accounted for 31%. However, by 2011, that figure had dropped to 28 percent. Interestingly, other sources change continuously (2%) and (3%) over three years

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between 2005 to 2008
 and 2011 in Northern Ireland.

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but
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year
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people
 spent the most for digital downloads

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details
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but
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largest
overall
 proportion of the sales in 2011.

In 2005, concert spending in Northern Ireland accounted for 31%. However
, by 2011, that figure had dropped to 28 percent. Interestingly
, other sources This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
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 (2%) and (3%) over three years