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The pie charts illustrate which sources that Germans and Nigerians look up initially to obtain the current affairs in a regular week

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The pie charts illustrate which sources that Germans and Nigerians look up initially to obtain the current affairs in a regular week. It should be noticed that the figures for Nigerians do not include rural areas around the country. Overall, as can be seen from the charts, the two countries witnessed significant differences in terms of places to access the news. While the majority of citizens of both countries prefer TV and Internet, which comprised over three-quarters of their population, newspaper, radio and other sources accounted for a minor proportion. One of the most prominent features is that in Nigeria, TV is the dominant first news provider, which is more than doubling the figures of Germany with 63%. On the other hand, newspapers tend to be the most prevalent tendency in Germany, its ratio accounted for 45%, roughly over three times that of Nigeria. With regards to the other methods of getting the news initially, there is an exact 10% of the German population getting current affairs through the radio, less than half of Nigerian radio listeners. Nevertheless, the Internet and other categories of sources in Germany tend to be more prevalent than they are in Nigeria, which accounted for 11% and 4% respectively, while Nigeria just experienced a tiny amount of 1% of their civilians connecting to those sources.
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that Germans and Nigerians look up
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affairs in a regular week. It should
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from the charts, the two countries witnessed significant differences in terms of places to access the news. While the majority of citizens of both countries prefer TV and Internet, which comprised over three-quarters of their population, newspaper, radio and
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accounted for a minor proportion.

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first
news provider, which is more than doubling the figures of Germany with 63%. On the
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hand, newspapers tend to be the most prevalent tendency in Germany, its ratio accounted for 45%, roughly over three times that of Nigeria.

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, there is an exact 10% of the German population getting
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affairs through the radio, less than half of Nigerian radio listeners.
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, the Internet and
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in Germany tend to be more prevalent than they are in Nigeria, which accounted for 11% and 4%
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, while Nigeria
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experienced a tiny amount of 1% of their civilians connecting to those
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate which sources that Germans and Nigerians look up initially to obtain the current affairs in a regular week

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