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The diagram illustrates heat lost and energy wasted which are happened in a house due to the air circulation.

The diagram illustrates heat lost and energy wasted which are happened in a house due to the air circulation. Ykld5
The picture illustrates what occurs with heat and energy when air goes into and out of the house. Dark and light arrows distinguishes air getting in and out accordingly. The diagrams shows the house and specifies the process of air circulation that leads to heat and energy loss. There are five rooms and one attic placed above the second floor. Several places are depicted where air leaks into and out of the house. Firstly, air gets into the house from dryer and kitchen fan vents. Some of air penetrates the building through windows and doors. It also might leak into from crawl space and electrical outlets. The exit for air is placed on the top layer of the house. Firstly, the threads go outside through a coupe of vents like bathroom fan and plumbing stack ones. Attic hatch and recessed lights, situated on the ceilings of the second floor, also affect air leak.
The picture illustrates what occurs with heat and energy when
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air
goes into and out of the
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house
. Dark and light arrows distinguishes
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air
getting in and out
accordingly
.

The diagrams
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shows
the
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house
and specifies the process of
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air
circulation that leads to heat and energy loss. There are five rooms and one attic placed above the second floor. Several places
are depicted
where
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air
leaks into and out of the
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house
.

Firstly
,
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air
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gets
into the
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house
from dryer and kitchen fan vents.
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Some
of
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air
penetrates the building through windows and doors. It
also
might leak into from crawl space and electrical outlets.

The exit for
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air
is placed
on the top layer of the
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house
.
Firstly
, the threads go outside through a coupe of vents like bathroom fan and plumbing stack ones. Attic hatch and recessed lights, situated on the ceilings of the second floor,
also
affect
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air
leak.

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates heat lost and energy wasted which are happened in a house due to the air circulation.

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4 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
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