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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The graphics compare the variety of energy production that is different in France between 1995 and 2005. As can be seen from the pie charts, in 1995, Nuclear energy stations experienced a downward trend, and it had faced a moderate increase at the end of the next decade. Similarly, coal production contributed a radical contribution and continued to go up by 2005. Looking at the highest rates, in 1995, coal, gas and petrol had captured massive proportions of the given data by 29. 80%, 29. 63%, and 29. 27% respectively, and these figures except petrol sector kept up to improve their percentages to just 30. 31% and 30. 93% separately. In contrast for this, the exponential decrease of petrol segment had been seen, albeit by a hefty 10%, in 2005. Although nuclear(6. 40%) and other(4. 90%) types of energy bases accounted for mere parts, these indicators had seen a significant jump as 10. 10% for nuclear energy production and 9. 10% for other ones after a period of 10 years.
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, albeit by a hefty 10%, in 2005.

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bases accounted for mere parts, these indicators had
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production and 9. 10% for other ones after a period of 10 years.
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