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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen meat pies.

The diagram shows the distinct steps involved in the production of frogen meet pies. At the first glance it can be noticed that, there are three main ingredients used in this process, which are gravy source, pea, carrot. In the first step, potatoes are being delivered up to two months before manufacturing of product to the store, whilst meat is being transferred two weeks or less beforehand, and kept refrigerate until use. Regarding second step, potatoes are being cleaned, peeled, and then converted into slices. Meanwhile, the product has been deforosted. Before doing quality inspection salts, and paper are being added to the material, followed by the removement of fat and converted into small pieces. The next step is about putting the produced material into containers. Analyzing further, prepared peas and carrot has been added before gravy. Afterwards, boil potatoes are put into pie, which then ready for wrapping. Before storing in shopes, this material is freezed.
The diagram
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shows
the distinct
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steps
involved in the production of
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frogen
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meet
pies.

At the
first
glance it can
be noticed
that, there are three main ingredients
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used
in this process, which are gravy source, pea, carrot. In the
first
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step
, potatoes are
being delivered
up to two months
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before
manufacturing of product to the store, whilst meat is
being transferred
two weeks or
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less
beforehand, and
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kept
refrigerate until
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use
.

Regarding second
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step
, potatoes are
being cleaned
, peeled, and then converted into slices. Meanwhile, the product has been
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deforosted
.
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Before
doing quality inspection salts, and paper are being
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added
to the material, followed by the
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removement
of
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fat
and converted into
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small
pieces. The
next
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step
is about putting the produced material into containers.

Analyzing
further
, prepared peas and carrot has been
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added
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before
gravy. Afterwards, boil potatoes
are put
into pie, which then ready for wrapping.
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Before
storing in
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shopes
, this material is
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freezed
.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen meat pies.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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