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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies

Various steps involved in the commercial production of frozen fish pies are sequenced in the given diagram. It is clear from the diagram that the preparation process is separate and the main ingredients here are fresh salmon, peas, sauce and potatoes. The potatoes are delivered to the factory up to a month in advance. These are cleaned thoroughly, peeled and then sliced. These are stored for the pie preparation after two steps: boiling and chilling. Turning to the fish preparation, the delivery of salmon slices is to be made to the factory within 12 hours prior to the process. Lemon juice and salt are added to these slices before they are steamed in the oven. In the next step, skin and bones are removed from it manually. This is followed by a thorough visual inspection. For the pie preparation, peas and sauce are needed, and these are prepared ahead of wrapping the pie in the microwaveable containers. The pies are wrapped manually in a systematic way, and are frozen before they are either stored or dispatched.
Various steps involved in the commercial production of frozen fish pies
are sequenced
in the
given
diagram.

It is
clear
from the diagram that the
preparation
process is separate and the main ingredients here are fresh salmon, peas, sauce and potatoes.

The potatoes
are delivered
to the factory up to a month in advance. These
are cleaned
thoroughly
, peeled and then sliced. These
are stored
for the pie
preparation
after two steps: boiling and chilling.

Turning to the fish
preparation
, the delivery of salmon slices is to
be made
to the factory within 12 hours prior to the process. Lemon juice and salt are
added
to these slices
before
they
are steamed
in the oven. In the
next
step, skin and bones
are removed
from it
manually
. This
is followed
by a thorough visual inspection.

For the pie
preparation
, peas and sauce
are needed
, and these
are prepared
ahead of wrapping the pie in the microwaveable containers. The pies
are wrapped
manually
in a systematic way, and
are frozen
before
they are either stored or dispatched.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
176 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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