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The pie charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three type of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The pie charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three type of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. PBLE
The pie charts represents the statistical information of different nutrients including sodium, saturated fat, and sugar consist in each meal. Overall, it is noticeable that both sodium and saturated fat have a highest percentage in dinner while sugar is majority in snacks. However, breakfast consist the least amount of all three bad nutrients. Focusing on Sodium and saturated fat, the unhealthy nutrients mostly found in dinner which are 43% and 37%, respectively. In addition, lunch has 3% more sodium than saturated fat. Interestingly, snacks and breakfast have same amount of sodium (14%) which is the least amount of nutrients. Turning to sugar, snacks consume the highest percentages among other meals, which is 42%. Furthermore, dinner take up almost one fourth of the sugar and lunch is 4% less than dinner(19%).
The pie charts represents the statistical information of
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, and
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consist in each meal.

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have
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while
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is majority in snacks.
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Focusing on Sodium and
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, the unhealthy nutrients
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found in
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dinner
which are 43% and 37%,
respectively
.
In addition
, lunch has 3% more sodium than
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saturated
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fat
.
Interestingly
, snacks and breakfast have same
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amount
of sodium (14%) which is the least amount of nutrients.

Turning to
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sugar
, snacks consume the highest percentages among other meals, which is 42%.
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,
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dinner
take up almost one fourth of the
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sugar
and lunch is 4% less than
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dinner(19%)
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three type of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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