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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. meBL

The pie charts reveal information about reasonable household expenses in a country in the years 1950 and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that housing was the major utilized spending in 1950 while health care was the least used expense. Furthermore, in 2010 there was significant disparities in the proportion of expenditures. As can be seen clearly, the figures for transportation rised significantly from 3% to 14. 0% while education rose to 3. 3% during the six decades. Apart from these, the demands for other expenditures rised from 4% to 19, 2 %. However the biggest decrease experienced by housing by 7% to 22% whereas the number of food showed the most minor increase over the same year. To be more specific, the fraction for health care witnessed the least change over the period with dropped from 2. 4 % to 4. 5 %

The pie charts reveal information about reasonable household expenses in a country in the years 1950 and 2010. Overall
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seen
 that housing was the major utilized spending in 1950 while health care was the least This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 expense. Furthermore
, in 2010 Did you mean "there were significant disparities"?there were significant disparities
there was significant disparities
 in the proportion of expenditures. As can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
clearly
, the figures for transportation Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "rose", the past tense form of the verb 'rise'?roseraisedriserisenrisesrisked
rised
significantly
 from 3% to 14. 0% while education rose to 3. 3% during the six decades. Apart from these, the demands for other expenditures Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "rose", the past tense form of the verb 'rise'?roseraisedriserisenrisesrisked
rised
 from 4% to 19, 2 %. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 the biggest decrease experienced by housing by 7% to 22% whereas the number of food This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
 the most minor increase over the same year. To be more specific, the fraction for health care witnessed the least This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 over the period with dropped from 2. 4 % to 4. 5 %

IELTS academic The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

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