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The pie charts below give data on the spending money and how the population is distributed

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The pie charts below illustrate the percentage of spending money and the distribution of population in the world. Overall, there are four main categories that people spend money on, namely food, clothing, housing and transport. moreover, Asia has the most share of population in the world. Turning to the first pie chart, we can observe that food is the biggest expenditure among other main categories that is four times larger than clothing with the lowest spending (24% compared to 6%). The contribution of transport account for 18% of spending which ranks second after food. Moreover, the proportion of housing is 12%. The remain 40% is allocated to a variety of other items. According to the second pie chart, there is a significant difference between population of Asia and other regions so that almost six out of every ten people in the world live in Asia. On the other hand, only 10% of population in the world inhabit in Africa. The contribution of population in Europe and America is similar (14%) and together form 1/3 of the world's population.
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in the world.

Overall
, there are four main categories that
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spend money on,
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, Asia has the most share of
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in the world.

Turning to the
first
pie chart, we can observe that food is the biggest expenditure among
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main categories
that is
four times larger than clothing with the lowest spending (24% compared to 6%). The contribution of transport account for 18% of spending which ranks second after food.
Moreover
, the proportion of housing is 12%.
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According to the second pie chart, there is a significant difference between
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of Asia and
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that almost six out of every ten
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in the world
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in Asia. On the
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10% of
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in the world inhabit in Africa. The contribution of
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in Europe and America is similar (14%) and together form 1/3 of the world's
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