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The pie chart shows the proportion of acceptable VQLM6
The circular chart illustrates the proportion of acceptable of present it supports use and the shop hours of the library in the campus. It also reflects the data by choosing and noticing the traits of them. Firstly, In the data it represents that there are two different duty. One of full time undergraduate working for this service and on another hand there is part-time scholar working for IT service support. The junior who are supporting for full time, in that half of the students are happy and satisfied from that about 52%. There are some undergraduate whop like to support entirely, these type of people occupies 44%. Some undergraduate are there who are not at all satisfied, they are at 8% which is the lowest. In part-time scholar, most of the undergraduate are happy which are maximum in percentage (48%). Here are few pupil who totally work, and they're having average portion (37%). Here 15% of title are there who not at all participate in IT service support.
The circular chart illustrates the proportion of acceptable of present it
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, In the data it represents that there are two
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duty. One of full time
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undergraduate
working for this service and on another hand there is part-time scholar working for IT service
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support
. The junior
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are supporting for full time, in that half of the students are happy and satisfied from that about 52%. There are
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some
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entirely
, these type of
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occupies 44%.
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there
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are not at all satisfied, they are at 8% which is the lowest. In part-time scholar, most of the
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are happy which are maximum in percentage (48%). Here are
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work, and they're having average portion (37%). Here 15% of title are there
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not at all participate in IT service
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