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The pie chart shows percentage of people arrested in 1989 to 1994 and bar graph shows reasons for arresting in 1994.

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The assigned task is combination of pie chart and bar graph which depicts the information how many percentage of civilians arrested in five years and causes for recent arresting, respective. Overall, after observing the whole graph, it can be clearly seen that males percentage was more who arrested than females and the most popular reason among both criminal genders was public drinking. To commence with, 32%men were arrested during 1989 to 1994 whereas women's percentage was only 9%, 91% females did not involve in any type of crime. Public drinking was the reason in which females proportion was higher than males which was accounted as about 37% and men were only 30%. While, driving after drinking was common in boys and the record was about 26%. In same activity, girls were 14% less than boys. The difference was 8% in breach of order crime between both genders. Moreover, other reasons were almost similar in female and male offenders that was 18%. The ratio of men was less in assaulting than women which was observed as 16% for men. However, cases of theft was just 3% more in male criminals than females. The percentage was 4% and 6% for men and women, respectively.
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of civilians arrested in five years and causes for recent arresting, respective.
Overall
, after observing the whole graph, it can be
clearly
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percentage
was more who arrested than
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females
and the most popular reason among both criminal genders was public drinking. To commence with, 32%
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men
were arrested
during 1989 to 1994 whereas women's
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percentage
was
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only
9%, 91%
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females
did not involve in any type of crime. Public drinking was the reason in which
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females
proportion was higher than
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males
which
was accounted
as about 37% and
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men
were
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only
30%. While, driving after drinking was common in boys and the record was about 26%. In same activity, girls were 14% less than boys. The difference was 8% in breach of order crime between both genders.
Moreover
, other reasons were almost similar in
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female
and male offenders that was 18%. The ratio of
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men
was less in assaulting than women which
was observed
as 16% for
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men
.
However
, cases of theft was
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just
3% more in male criminals than
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females
. The
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percentage
was 4% and 6% for
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men
and women,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows percentage of people arrested in 1989 to 1994 and bar graph shows reasons for arresting in 1994.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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