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The pie chart gives information about the initial occupations of Anthropology students after graduation, whereas the table depicts their 5 years’ work in various sectors.

The pie chart gives information about the initial occupations of Anthropology students after graduation, whereas the table depicts their 5 years’ work in various sectors. PR8mJ
The pie chart gives information about the initial occupations of Anthropology students after graduation, whereas the table depicts their 5 years’ work in various sectors. Overall, the majority of graduates took full-time jobs, followed by part-time works, unemployed, graduate study or unknown, and ultimately part-time work together with graduate study. The average salaries tended to be much higher consultants than those working in the government, though there were numerous federal workers in the top income category. A total of 52% of graduates were working full-time, compared to 15% for part-time, 12% unemployed, 8% categorized as unknown, 8% pursuing full-time further education, and finally 5% combining part-time work and higher education study. Turning to the table, freelance consultants were overwhelming employed in the higher pay scales at 40% at both $75, 000-$99, 999 and $100, 000 and up, with only 20% making $25, 000 or more to $49, 999. Government employees exhibit a broadly similar pattern with identical numbers at the bottom two salaries, 30% between $75, 000 and $99, 999 and 50% earning more than one hundred thousand dollars a year. Private industry salaries diverged with 10% in the lowest income range, a striking 35% earning $50, 000 to $74, 999, while 25% and 30% of graduates made $75, 000-$99, 999 and $100, 000+, respectively.
The pie chart gives information about the initial occupations of Anthropology students after graduation, whereas the table depicts their 5 years’
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work
in various sectors.

Overall
, the majority of
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graduates
took full-time jobs, followed by part-time works, unemployed,
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graduate
study or unknown, and
ultimately
part-time
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work
together with
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graduate
study. The average salaries tended to be much higher consultants than those working in the
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government
, though there were numerous federal workers in the top income category.

A total of 52% of
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graduates
were working full-time, compared to 15% for part-time, 12% unemployed, 8% categorized as unknown, 8% pursuing full-time
further
education, and
finally
5% combining part-time
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work
and higher education study.

Turning to the table, freelance consultants were overwhelming employed in the higher pay scales at 40% at both $75, 000-$99, 999 and $100, 000 and up, with
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only
20% making $25, 000 or more to $49, 999.
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Government
employees exhibit a
broadly
similar pattern with identical numbers at the bottom two salaries, 30% between $75, 000 and $99, 999 and 50% earning more than one hundred thousand dollars a year.
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Private industry
salaries diverged with 10% in the lowest income range, a striking 35% earning $50, 000 to $74, 999, while 25% and 30% of
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graduates
made $75, 000-$99, 999 and $100, 000+,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The pie chart gives information about the initial occupations of Anthropology students after graduation, whereas the table depicts their 5 years’ work in various sectors.

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