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The pie chart below shows the percentage of what nursing graduates did in the UK in 2000, and the table below shows the percentage of those graduates working in the health sector in the same year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart below shows the percentage of what nursing graduates did in the UK in 2000, and the table below shows the percentage of those graduates working in the health sector in the same year. R0kpG
The pie chart gives information about what did nursing major students do when they graduate, while the table illustrates the destinations of these students in health sectors in Britain in 2009. Overall, it is apparent that a great majority of nursing students chose to work in the health sector after they had left school. Also, the largest percentage of these students worked as hospital nurses. As can be seen from the chart, just over three-quarters of nursing graduates found a job in the health sector. In addition, a minority of these graduates decided to pursue higher education, at 8%, which was twice as high as the figure for those who combine studying with working, with 4%. Meanwhile, the proportion of nursing students who made other decisions and were unemployed were 10% and 1%, accordingly. Regarding the table, seven out of ten nursing major graduates, who enter the health sector, want to work as hospital nurses. The figure for midwives and mental health nurses differed slightly, with 12% and 10% respectively. Finally, the health administration had a considerably low employee (2%), which was three times lower than that of other parts of the health sector (6%).
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nursing
major
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students
do when they
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graduate
, while the table illustrates the destinations of these
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students
in
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health
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sectors
in Britain in 2009.
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, it is apparent that a great majority of nursing
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students
chose to work in the
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health
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sector
after they had
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left
school.
Also
, the largest percentage of these
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students
worked as hospital nurses.

As can be
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seen
from the chart,
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just
over three-quarters of nursing
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graduates
found a job in the
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health
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sector
.
In addition
, a minority of these
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graduates
decided to pursue higher education, at 8%, which was twice as high as the figure for those who combine studying with working, with 4%. Meanwhile, the proportion of nursing
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students
who made other decisions and
were unemployed
were 10% and 1%,
accordingly
.

Regarding the table, seven out of ten nursing major
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graduates
, who enter the
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health
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sector
, want to work as hospital nurses. The figure for midwives and mental
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health
nurses differed
slightly
, with 12% and 10%
respectively
.
Finally
, the
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health
administration had a
considerably
low employee (2%), which was three times lower than that of other parts of the
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health
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sector
(6%).
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the percentage of what nursing graduates did in the UK in 2000, and the table below shows the percentage of those graduates working in the health sector in the same year.

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