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The graph displays the average number of UK commuters who travel on a daily basis by three different forms of transport from 1970 to 2030.

The graph displays the average number of UK commuters who travel on a daily basis by three different forms of transport from 1970 to 2030. Wgmbk
Overall, the number of both commuters using cars and trains rise over a period of 60 years. By contrast, the numbers of people using bus are decline. Additionally, the figure for car in most years is the highest common vehicles during the period shown. In the 1970-2000 period, the number of people using cars and trains dramatically increase, nearly 7. 000. 000 and 3. 000. 000 respectively. In the same year, the number of commuters who use bus slightly lower than that of the number of commuters using cars and trains, stand at approximately 4. 000. 000. This figure for bus still above 3. 500. 000 in 2010 while the number of people moving by cars and train remain relatively stable at around 7 million and 3 million respectively, then are project to reach a peak of in 2030. Over the next 20 years, the number of workers in UK going by cars more enormously climb than people who use trains. It rise to 8. 000. 000 from 2010 to 2020 before reaching the highest point of the whole line graph, 9. 000. 000 in 2030, whereas bus is tend to deacrease in the number of commuters by over 4. 000. 000 falling to around 3. 000. 000 in 2030.
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