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The pie chart and the table shows major reasons why there is less productivity in agricultural land in three regions of the world in 1990s.

The pie chart and the table shows major reasons why there is less productivity in agricultural land in three regions of the world in 1990s. OJDN
As can be seen in the pie chart the main causes are overgrazing and deforestation that’s 35% and 30% respectively. the other reason why land has low productivity is over cultivation which is 28% of the total. The other has only 7% effect on land degradation. However, the table shows the causes of land degradation across different parts of the world. Europe, has the highest percentage of land degradation (23%) and deforestation was the main reason and it was 9. 8%. While other two were around 5% to 7%. In Oceana deforestation (1. 7%) and overgrazing (11. 3%) were the main cause. While, over cultivation had zero effect on land degradation. lastly, North America was least affected by land degradation mostly due to overgrazing and over cultivation.
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has low productivity is over cultivation which is 28% of the total. The other has
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(23%) and deforestation was the main reason and it was 9. 8%.
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IELTS academic The pie chart and the table shows major reasons why there is less productivity in agricultural land in three regions of the world in 1990s.

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