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The picture illustrates different steps of how potato chips are made, including the actions of checking potato quality, washer, cold rinse water, peeler, peels and starch action, bucket conveyor, slicer, air action, flatbed conveyor, deep fryer, salter, flat belt conveyor, bag packer and bulk can filler.

The picture illustrates different steps of how potato chips are made, including the actions of checking potato quality, washer, cold rinse water, peeler, peels and starch action, bucket conveyor, slicer, air action, flatbed conveyor, deep fryer, salter, flat belt conveyor, bag packer and bulk can filler. JJew
The picture illustrates different steps of how potato chips are made, including the actions of checking potato quality, washer, cold rinse water, peeler, peels and starch action, bucket conveyor, slicer, air action, flatbed conveyor, deep fryer, salter, flat belt conveyor, bag packer and bulk can filler. Firstly, workers checking the quality of potatoes. Second, they are carried to the Washer section. Third, the washer machine washing them and pushed them to the Peeler section. In this section Peels and Starch are separated of potatoes. Then, they are carried to the Slicer machine while rinsing by cold water. After that, the potatoes are slicing by the Slicer. Next, they placed on the flatbed conveyor and transferred to the next section while air is blowing to them. After that, the Deep Fryer makes them dry and placed the outputs on the Flat Belt Conveyor. Next, in this moment they make salty by Salter while they are carrying to Bag Packer machine. Finally, they are packed or Alternatively, they moved to the Bulk Can Filler section.
The picture illustrates
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different
steps of how
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potato
chips
are made
, including the actions of checking
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potato
quality, washer,
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cold
rinse water, peeler, peels and starch action, bucket conveyor, slicer, air action, flatbed conveyor, deep fryer, salter, flat belt conveyor, bag packer and bulk can filler.

Firstly
, workers checking the quality of
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potatoes
. Second, they
are carried
to the Washer
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section
. Third, the washer machine washing them and pushed them to the Peeler
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section
. In this
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section
Peels and Starch
are separated
of
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potatoes
. Then, they
are carried
to the Slicer machine while rinsing by
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cold
water. After that, the
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potatoes
are slicing by the Slicer.
Next
, they placed on the flatbed conveyor and transferred to the
next
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section
while air is blowing to them. After that, the Deep Fryer
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makes
them dry and placed the outputs on the Flat Belt Conveyor.
Next
,
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in this moment
they
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make
salty by Salter while they are carrying to Bag Packer machine.
Finally
, they
are packed
or
Alternatively
, they
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moved
to the Bulk Can Filler
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section
.

IELTS academic The picture illustrates different steps of how potato chips are made, including the actions of checking potato quality, washer, cold rinse water, peeler, peels and starch action, bucket conveyor, slicer, air action, flatbed conveyor, deep fryer, salter, flat belt conveyor, bag packer and bulk can filler.

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