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The picture below shows the life cycle of the salmon.

The picture below shows the life cycle of the salmon. m9A0q
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of fish that name is salmon. Overall, it is clear a salmon fish is live in both waters like salty and fresh. How salmon eggs are crack and live together. In the start of, the salmon fish sets their eggs in upper ground of river between small stones and reeds. These eggs are take time to hatch approximately 5-6 months. After hatching of eggs a baby salmon fish out from their eggs and it small fish called fry. These small fry fish lives in river around 4 years as it is not able to live between big fish. The small Fry fish is 3-8 cm long. After moving to Sea water these Smolts fish change in adult salmon. It is very super gish.
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of fish that name is salmon.
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, it is
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a salmon fish is
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in both waters like salty and fresh. How salmon eggs are crack and
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together. In the
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of, the salmon fish sets their eggs in upper ground of river between
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stones and reeds. These eggs are take time to hatch approximately 5-6 months. After hatching of eggs a baby salmon fish out from their eggs and
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fish called fry. These
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fry fish
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in river around 4 years as it is not able to
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between
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fish. The
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Fry fish is 3-8 cm long.
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fish
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in adult salmon. It is
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