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the maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015.

the maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. 31Jb
The maps compare the differences in the development in the outskirts of Fosbury in the years 1980 and 2015. Overall, the area was modernized by changing from residential to a more industrial zone. Firstly, a row of houses and the hotel were still in a similar location from 1980 to 2015. The roundabout was built, which replaced the Grocer's shop and block of flats. Then, there was a relocation of the 2015 terraced houses, moving to the place that used to be a park in 1980. Moreover, the old region of the terraced houses turned into parking lots and supermarkets. Next, two past tennis courts were expanded and become the sports center and car park. On the opposite side, another major change to the area was in the large fields, the warehouses were constructed.
The maps compare the differences in the development in the outskirts of
Fosbury
in the years 1980 and 2015.

Overall
, the area
was modernized
by changing from residential to a more industrial zone.

Firstly
, a row of
houses
and the hotel were
still
in a similar location from 1980 to 2015. The roundabout
was built
, which replaced the Grocer's shop and block of flats. Then, there was a relocation of the 2015 terraced
houses
, moving to the place that
used
to be a park in 1980.
Moreover
, the
old
region of the terraced
houses
turned into parking lots and supermarkets.

Next
, two past tennis courts
were expanded
and become the sports center and car park. On the opposite side, another major
change
to the area was in the large fields, the warehouses
were constructed
.
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IELTS academic the maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
134 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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