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The maps illustrate some changes that were made to a city hospital's transport infrastructure between the years 2007 and 2010

The maps illustrate some changes that were made to a city hospital's transport infrastructure between the years 2007 and 2010 7rxPA
The maps illustrate some changes that were made to a city hospital's transport infrastructure between the years 2007 and 2010. It is noticeable that three main modifications were made to the hospital’s vehicle access. These involved the building of a new bus station, new roundabouts and new parking facilities. Looking at the changes in more detail, we can see that in 2007 there were three bus stops on either side of Hospital Road. These were no longer present in 2010, and instead we see the addition of a bus station on the west side of Hospital Road. This bus station is accessed via two new roundabouts; the first roundabout is at the intersection of City Road and Hospital Road, while the second is at the other end of Hospital Road, at the junction with the hospital ring road. The two maps also show that changes were made to public and staff parking areas. In 2007, staff and visitors used the same car park, which was situated to the east of Hospital Road and accessed via the ring road. However, by 2010 this original car park had become a designated area for staff parking only. A new car park, located on the east side of the ring road, provided parking for members of the public.
The maps illustrate
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to a city hospital's transport infrastructure between the years 2007 and 2010.

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were made
to the
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hospital’s
vehicle access. These involved the building of a
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new
bus station,
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roundabouts and
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new
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facilities.

Looking at the
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changes
in more detail, we can
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see
that in 2007 there were three bus
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stops
on either side of
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Hospital
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Road
. These were no longer present in 2010, and
instead
we
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the addition of a bus station on the west side of
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Hospital
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Road
. This bus station
is accessed
via two
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new
roundabouts; the
first
roundabout is at the intersection of City
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Road
and
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Hospital
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Road
, while the second is at the other
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end
of
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Hospital
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Road
, at the junction with the
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hospital
ring road.

The two maps
also
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changes
were made
to public and staff
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parking
areas. In 2007, staff and visitors
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used
the same car park, which
was situated
to the east of
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Hospital
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Road
and accessed via the ring
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road
.
However
, by 2010 this original car park had become a designated area for staff
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parking
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only
. A
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new
car park, located on the east side of the ring
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road
, provided
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parking
for members of the public.
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IELTS academic The maps illustrate some changes that were made to a city hospital's transport infrastructure between the years 2007 and 2010

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