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The diagram illustrates processes of cement production and then how this cement is used for concrete creation

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The diagram illustrates processes of cement production and then how this cement is used for concrete creation. Overall, cement production follows four essential processes for making cement while concrete production is done by one combination method. According to cement production, Limestone and clay are mixed on a crusher for making powder. Then the powder is entered into a hole which is called a mixer. However, there is a connection with a rotating heater pipe, and it works for revolving to the heat. moreover, cement materials are ready to drop on a grinder machine systemically while the heating procedure is completed. After that, the equipment is a grind to the paste and finally, the cement becomes ready to be packed. On the other hand, some items are needed for concrete production. methodically, 15% of cement and 25% sand drop in a concrete mixer whereas 10% of water and 50% gravel which means small stones fell into this instrument for mixed up everything together by rotating respectively. After that, the concrete is qualified for use.
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and then how this
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is
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used
for concrete creation.

Overall
,
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cement
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follows four essential processes for making
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while concrete
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production
is done
by one combination method.

According to
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cement
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production
, Limestone and clay
are mixed
on a crusher for making powder. Then the powder
is entered
into a hole which
is called
a mixer.
However
, there is a connection with a rotating heater pipe, and it works for revolving to the heat.
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moreover
,
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cement
materials are ready to drop on a grinder machine
systemically
while the heating procedure
is completed
. After that, the equipment is a grind to the paste and
finally
, the
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cement
becomes ready to
be packed
.

On the other hand
,
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some
items
are needed
for concrete
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production
.
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methodically
, 15% of
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cement
and 25% sand drop in a concrete mixer whereas 10% of water and 50% gravel which means
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small
stones fell into this instrument for mixed up everything together by rotating
respectively
. After that, the concrete
is qualified
for
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use
.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates processes of cement production and then how this cement is used for concrete creation

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