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The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.

The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed. BJwN5
The maps illustrate the growth of the Paradise Island for travelling industry in period of past and present. Overall, in the past, paradise island included some trees, a natural spring in the east and a scientific research station in the west. Over development time, there are many changes, such as trees were cut down to construct a restaurant, and to the west scientific research station is replaced by a swimming pool and hotel complex; but a natural spring and pier remain the same with change in size. It is clear that, in the present, across from restaurant in the west is a hotel complex near a swimming pool, and in the east is a BBQ area near cycle path. There is a scene in the northeast beside rocks, and a cafe close a natural spring. Currently, a boat is replaced by cruise ship, and to the west of island pier is reconstructed with bigger than size.
The maps illustrate the growth of the Paradise Island for travelling industry in period of past and present.

Overall
, in the past,
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paradise island
included
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some
trees, a natural spring in the east and a scientific research station in the west. Over development time, there are
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many
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changes
, such as trees were
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cut
down to construct a restaurant, and to the west scientific research station
is replaced
by a swimming pool and hotel complex;
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but
a natural spring and pier remain the same with
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change
in size.

It is
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clear
that, in the present, across from restaurant in the west is a hotel complex near a swimming pool, and in the east is a BBQ area near cycle path. There is a scene in the northeast beside rocks, and a
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cafe
close a natural spring.
Currently
, a boat
is replaced
by cruise ship, and to the west of island pier
is reconstructed
with bigger than size.
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