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The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century

The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century e5e9p
The two maps show how the town of Lakeside developed over a ten-year period from 2000 to 2009. Overall, the town became more urbanised during this period, as well as losing some of its original features. The most striking change was the loss of two residential areas in the west and south of the town. The first of these was turned into a shopping centre, while the second was demolished to make way for an extension to the industrial complex in the south east. This complex also replaced a large area of woodland, in which the lake became a small pond. In the northern part of Lakeside, the derelict warehouses and old town were pulled down. They were replaced by a car park, offices and a new university. Finally, a multi-screen cinema was built on the site of the old arts centre in the west of the town, and the school was converted into newer schools, slightly closer to the river. The only part of Lakeside that did not change was the large residential area situated in the north east of the town.
The two maps
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of Lakeside developed over a ten-year period from 2000 to 2009.

Overall
, the
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town
became more
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urbanised
during this period,
as well
as losing
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some
of its original features.

The most striking
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change
was the loss of two residential areas in the west and south of the
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town
. The
first
of these
was turned
into a shopping
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centre
, while the second
was demolished
to
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make
way for an extension to the industrial complex in the
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south east
. This complex
also
replaced a large area of woodland, in which the lake became a
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small
pond.

In the northern part of Lakeside, the derelict warehouses and
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old
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town
were pulled
down. They
were replaced
by a car park, offices and a new university.
Finally
, a multi-screen cinema
was built
on the site of the
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old
arts
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centre
in the west of the
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town
, and the school
was converted
into newer schools,
slightly
closer to the river. The
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only
part of Lakeside that did not
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change
was the large residential area situated in the
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north east
of the
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town
.
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IELTS academic The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century

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