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The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.

The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. ppWw
In both maps illustrate the basic changes which have taken in the Kimsville between the year 2002 and today. At all, it appears that Kimsville has become a much more modern city with far more factories and technology facilities. One interesting change is that a new train station has been built, to connect the new appartment with shopping centre. In 2002 there wasn't any place to live but a new appartment has been built near the shopping centre. And also there was another changes in place of factory there has been built software company. If we look to the south side of the city instead of the old cinema there has been constructed a pub it is a building in Britain where alcohol can be bought and drunk. The south-west of the city used to be a green area, with lots of trees, but new football stadium has been erected. Finally the city has been transformed much more than the past.
In both maps illustrate the basic
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which have taken in the
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Kimsville
between the year 2002 and
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today
.

At all, it appears that
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Kimsville
has become a much more modern city with far more factories and technology facilities.

One interesting
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change
is that a
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new
train station has
been built
, to connect the
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new
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appartment
with shopping
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centre
. In 2002 there wasn't any place to
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live
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but
a
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new
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appartment
has
been built
near the shopping
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centre
. And
also
there was another
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changes
in place of factory there has
been built
software
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company
.

If we look to the south side of the city
instead
of the
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cinema there has
been constructed
a pub it is a building in Britain where alcohol can be
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bought
and drunk. The south-west of the city
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used
to be a green area, with lots of trees,
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but
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new
football stadium has
been erected
.
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Finally
the city has
been transformed
much more than the past.

IELTS academic The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.

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4 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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