Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

the maps below show changes that took place in youngsville over 25 years period

the maps below show changes that took place in youngsville over 25 years period bb396
The maps illustrate the development which took place in Youngsville, New Zealand, between 1980 and 2005. In 1980 there were a great deal of green zones around the town but after 25 years it can be seen that the situation changed and there were barely any trees in any area. In 1980, there was a residential district on the north-east of the town and in front of the hospital located on the north-west there was a lake surrounded by a huge number of trees. On the other hand, in 2005, on the north-side of the village there were a few more facilities: a stadium and parking were built up and as a consequence green zones were eliminated. In 2005, new infrastructures were built, a high rise was built on the sea side, while on the south-west a new industrial estate was built with factories and warehouses. As a result of this situation, the houses, parks and picnic areas that were in this area in 1980 were knocked down. In addition to this, a marina was built alongside the river. Overall, even though the main facilities as in the school, hospital and airport were preserved, the residential suburbs and parks had been replaced with factories and stadiums. It is clear that the town experienced a change from a coastal quiet town to an industrial estate.
The maps illustrate the development which took place in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Youngsville
, New Zealand, between 1980 and 2005.

In 1980 there were a great deal of green zones around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
town
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
after 25 years it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that the situation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
and there were
barely
any trees in any area. In 1980, there was a residential district on the north-east of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
town
and in front of the hospital located on the north-west there was a lake surrounded by a huge number of trees.
On the other hand
, in 2005, on the north-side of the village there were a few more facilities: a stadium and parking
were built
up and as a consequence green zones
were eliminated
.

In 2005, new infrastructures
were built
, a high rise
was built
on the sea side, while on the south-west a new industrial estate
was built
with factories and warehouses.
As a result
of this situation, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
, parks and picnic areas that were in this area in 1980
were knocked
down.
In addition
to this, a marina
was built
alongside the river.

Overall
,
even though
the main facilities as in the school, hospital and airport
were preserved
, the residential suburbs and parks had
been replaced
with factories and stadiums. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
town
experienced a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
from a coastal quiet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
town
to an industrial estate.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic the maps below show changes that took place in youngsville over 25 years period

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
224 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • the maps below show changes that took place in youngsville over 25 years period