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The map shows how district park was changed from year 1908 and now.

The map shows how district park was changed from year 1908 and now. X7V0g
The map shows the layout of a district park as it was in the year 1908 and today. Overall, as can be seen from the development. The more notable changes taking place in the area is the construction of picnic area, boating area, cafe etc. Firstly, the cycle path around the district park was entirely knocked down. The car park in the west of the district became smaller to accommodate only 20 cars. A new picnic area was built to the southwest of the district park. A children's play area was constructed next to the children's soft play area. The green area in the southeast corner was reduced to make way for toilets which is constructed between the children's soft play area and green area. A new cafe was installed inside the green park. The pond in the south was replaced by a boating area. Meanwhile, the football ground, tennis court, entrance was remained unchanged over the 10 years
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shows
the layout of a
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district
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park
as it was in the year 1908 and
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today
.

Overall
, as can be
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seen
from the development. The more notable
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changes
taking place in the
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area
is the construction of picnic
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area
, boating
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area
,
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cafe
etc.

Firstly
, the cycle path around the
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district
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park
was
entirely
knocked down. The car
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park
in the west of the
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district
became smaller to accommodate
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only
20 cars. A new picnic
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area
was built
to the southwest of the
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district
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park
. A children's play
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area
was constructed
next
to the children's soft play
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area
. The green
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area
in the southeast corner was
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reduced
to
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make
way for toilets which
is constructed
between the children's soft play
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area
and green
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. A new
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cafe
was installed
inside the green
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park
. The pond in the south
was replaced
by a boating
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area
. Meanwhile, the football ground, tennis court, entrance
was remained
unchanged over the 10 years
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