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The map shows changes in the town of Fosbury between 1980 and2015

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The Two maps set out the main changes which have taken place in the town of Fosbury. Pictures Are given for 1980 and 2015. Overall, during 35 years town saw changes recreationally commercially and Noticeably circle road occurred. The most Striking alteration is residential and commercial facilities constructed more. By 2015 Park had relocated other side of road Another Significant change is Car park and Supermarket replaced into Terraced houses. If we look at the Field area By 2015 It had been removed and Added extra residential facilities such as Warehouses. The area’sports Facilities also had been developed, new Sports centre Taking place the tennis courts. Another Alternative Change is Roads Infrastructure had been modernized, with roads expanded significantly. The main change was addition of Circle road In the centre of the town. Moreover, The had been other Commercial and residential changes. For example Block Of Flats Had been put up The north side of Town, In Addition, Grocer's Shop had behind of the Flats.
The Two maps set out the main
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changes
which have taken place in the
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town
of
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Fosbury
. Pictures Are
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given
for 1980 and 2015.
Overall
, during 35 years
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town
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saw
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changes
recreationally
commercially
and
Noticeably
circle
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road
occurred.

The most Striking alteration is residential and commercial facilities constructed more. By 2015 Park had relocated other side of
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road
Another Significant
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change
is Car park and Supermarket replaced into Terraced
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houses
. If we look at the Field area By 2015 It had
been removed
and
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Added
extra residential facilities such as Warehouses.

The area’sports Facilities
also
had
been developed
, new Sports
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centre
Taking place the tennis courts. Another Alternative
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Change
is
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Roads
Infrastructure had
been modernized
, with
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roads
expanded
significantly
. The main
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change
was addition of Circle
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road
In the
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centre
of the
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town
.
Moreover
, The had been other Commercial and residential
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changes
.
For example
Block Of Flats Had
been put
up The north side of
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Town
,
In Addition
, Grocer's Shop had behind of the Flats.

IELTS academic The map shows changes in the town of Fosbury between 1980 and2015

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165 words
6.0
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