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the map below show the Science Park in 2008 and the same back today

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The maps illustrate data about, how science park look like in the year 2008 and currently and various changes in infrastructure. Overall, it can be seen from the outline the major changies in grassland and cycle path in park of science. To starth with, in the year 2008, Science park had wide grassland area in west side, and currently that place replaced and constructed new Research and development area. Besides, east side of the park in past time park had office area of upper side, but now a days the second down side have new University hub. Secondly, the major change were seen in cycle path this path newly added next to the road on the contrary this path does not exist in ancient time. Thirdly, 2008's extended car park was make tiny and cyber security centre were extended. Moreover, IT centre replaced with Innovation centre and station was removed in current time and new bus stop constructed on east side of park.
The maps illustrate data about, how science
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look like in the year 2008 and
currently
and various
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changes
in infrastructure.

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, it can be
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seen
from the outline the major
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changies
in grassland and cycle
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path
in
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park
of science.

To
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starth
with, in the year 2008, Science
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park
had wide grassland area in west side, and
currently
that place replaced and constructed new Research and development area.
Besides
, east side of the
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park
in
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past time
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park
had office area of upper side,
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but
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now a days
the second
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down side
have new University hub.
Secondly
, the major
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change
were
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seen
in cycle
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path
this
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path
newly
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added
next
to the road
on the contrary
this
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path
does not exist in ancient time.
Thirdly
, 2008's extended car
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park
was
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make
tiny and cyber security
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centre
were extended
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, IT
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centre
replaced with Innovation
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centre
and station
was removed
in
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current
time and new bus
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stop
constructed on east side of
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