Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The line shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime ( home burglary, car theft, street burglary) in Wales and England from 1970- 2005.

The line shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime ( home burglary, car theft, street burglary) in Wales and England from 1970- 2005. 0a5x1
The line graph demonstrates the amount of three kind of offences that took place which changed in both England and Wales countries between 1970 and 2005. Overall, the was a significant deteriorated in the incidents of Burglary crime and also was the popular with highest crimes in the first years while the number of car theft situations experienced to oscillate over the two countries and the incidents of the Roberry followed to remain almost unchanged. With regarding to the offense of burglary had the highest proportion we just under 3500 offset incidents in 2003. The crime situation of the car theft and Robbery which respectfully stood at 2750 n 700 of the incidents in 2003. On the other hand, between 2004 and 2012, the burglary crime rose slightly to pick of 3750 of incidents respectively and thereafter the figure get improved the less of incidents (1600 persons) in 2007 when the crimes vacillated almost by 1250 between 2008 and 2012. Likewise, the offense of car theft it might not solid with 2750 till 2005 and having rose to approximately 2600 in 2010 but the house of crime get the improved with 2400 in last years. Similarly, the incidence of robbery remined erratically by 600 peoples over nine years period.
The line graph demonstrates the amount of three
Possible agreement error. The noun 'kind' seems to be countable, so consider using: "kinds".
kind
of
Possible spelling mistake. 'offences' is British English.
offences
that took place which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
in both England and Wales countries between 1970 and 2005.

Overall
,
Please check whether a word is missing between 'the' and 'was' or whether 'the' is the correct determiner.
the
was a significant deteriorated in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
incidents
of Burglary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
and
also
was the popular with
A determiner is probably missing here: "the highest".
highest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
in the
first
years while the number of car theft situations experienced to oscillate over the two countries and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
incidents
of the
Possible spelling mistake found.
Roberry
followed to remain almost unchanged.

With
The phrase 'regarding to' is not correct. Use "regarding" or "regard to".
regarding to
the offense of burglary had the highest proportion we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
under 3500 offset
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
incidents
in 2003. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
situation of the car theft and Robbery which
respectfully
stood at 2750 n 700 of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
incidents
in 2003.

On the other hand
, between 2004 and 2012, the burglary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
rose
slightly
to pick of 3750 of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
incidents
respectively
and thereafter the figure
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
The phrase 'the less of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the less of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
incidents
(1600 persons) in 2007 when the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crimes
vacillated almost by 1250 between 2008 and 2012.
Likewise
, the offense of car theft it
The word 'solid' is a noun or an adjective. A verb is missing or misspelled, or maybe a comma is missing.
might not solid
with 2750 till 2005 and having rose to approximately 2600 in 2010
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
with 2400 in last years.
Similarly
, the incidence of robbery
Possible spelling mistake found.
remined
erratically
by 600 peoples over nine years period.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The line shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime ( home burglary, car theft, street burglary) in Wales and England from 1970- 2005.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The line shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime ( home burglary, car theft, street burglary) in Wales and England from 1970- 2005.