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The line graphs illustrate the percentage of residents with electrical appliances and the number of hours spent in doing housework per family over a period of almost a century, starting from 1920.

The line graphs illustrate the percentage of residents with electrical appliances and the number of hours spent in doing housework per family over a period of almost a century, starting from 1920. 7re7b
There is an analysis between two aspects of doing households chore including the proportion of using machines as well as technology in doing housework and how many hours which was spent on housework per week during a century in the two discriminated chart. Overall, it is noticeable that while the tendency to using machines as well as technology to cater for doing housework has an upward trend continued in the first graph, the remaining graph illustrates the downward trend of time which was used for housework per week in the past. As first with the percentage graph, the machines which were used to make clean clothes, refrigerators, vacuum cleaners were used to take care of household chores commonly. From the year 1920, the number of three types of machines accounted for 0%, 30%, 40%, respectively of the refrigerator, vacuum and the machines of washing clothes. However, these values did not maintain for the next 2 decades. There is a skyrocketing trend in the refrigerator from the lowest in 1920 at 0% to the highest point in 1980 at 100% and maintain for now. Along with the increase in refrigerator demands, Vacuum cleaners was also accounted for the highest peak at 100% after two decades in the 20th century. On the other hand, the parameter of washing machines rose up slightly and at the peak of 75% in the year 2019. The second graph depicts the labor time spent on household works in the year 1920 at the point 50 hours per week in the following 40 years, this index decreased dramatically and in the year 1960, it is only at 20 hours per week. After that, this downward trend was declined slowly throughout each 2 decades.
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machines
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housework
and how
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many
hours which
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housework
per
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during a century in the two discriminated chart.

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machines
as well
as technology to cater for doing
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housework
has an upward
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trend
continued in the
first
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graph
, the remaining
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graph
illustrates the downward
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trend
of time which was
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used
for
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housework
per
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week
in the past.

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with the percentage
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graph
, the
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machines
which were
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used
to
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make
clean clothes,
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refrigerators
, vacuum cleaners were
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used
to take care of household chores
commonly
. From the
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year
1920, the number of three types of
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machines
accounted for 0%, 30%, 40%,
respectively
of the
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refrigerator
, vacuum and the
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machines
of washing clothes.
However
, these values did not maintain for the
next
2 decades. There is a skyrocketing
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trend
in the
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refrigerator
from the lowest in 1920 at 0% to the highest point in 1980 at 100% and maintain for
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now
. Along with the increase in
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refrigerator
demands, Vacuum cleaners was
also
accounted for the highest peak at 100% after two decades in the 20th century.
On the other hand
, the parameter of washing
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machines
rose up
slightly
and at the peak of 75% in the
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year
2019.

The second
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graph
depicts the labor time spent on household works in the
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year
1920 at the point 50 hours per
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week
in the following 40 years, this index decreased
dramatically
and in the
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year
1960, it is
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only
at 20 hours per
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week
. After that, this downward
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trend
was declined
slowly
throughout each 2 decades.
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