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The line graph shows the number of kilograms of different foods were consumed per person

The line graph shows the number of kilograms of different foods were consumed per person 5kjWA
The line graph shows the number of kilograms of different foods were consumed per person by Australians in the 60 year period from 1939 to 1999. Overall it is clear that more was eaten in 1999 than in 1939 in all cadegories except meat. Also, vegetables were consumed the most, while seafood was consumed the least throughout this period. In 1939, 140 kilograms per person of vegetables were consumed and this amount went zig-zag until it changed in 1980. After that, there is a dramatic rose to reach a height of 160 kilograms in 1999. There was a similar trend with the eating of fruit which fluttered at around 80 kilograms until 1959 then rose to 140 kilograms in 1999. The popularity of bread increased throughout the 30’s, 40’s and 50’s from 40 to about 70 kilograms, which was followed by a gradual declination and then a rise to 60 in the final decade. Seafood consumption was also increased, but only slightly from 18 to 20 kilograms in this period. In contrast, meat consumption reached a peak in the late 1970’s at 120 kilograms, but then fell steady to lowest point of 80 kilograms in 1999.
The line graph
shows
the number of kilograms of
different
foods were
consumed
per person by Australians in the
60 year
period from 1939 to 1999.

Overall
it is
clear
that more
was eaten
in 1999 than in 1939 in all
cadegories
except meat.
Also
, vegetables were
consumed
the most, while seafood was
consumed
the least throughout this period.

In 1939, 140 kilograms per person of vegetables
were
consumed
and this amount went
zig-zag
until it
changed
in 1980. After that, there is a dramatic rose to reach a height of 160 kilograms in 1999. There was a similar trend with the eating of fruit which fluttered at around 80 kilograms until 1959 then rose to 140 kilograms in 1999.

The popularity of bread increased throughout the
30’s
,
40’s
and
50’s
from 40 to about 70 kilograms, which
was followed
by a gradual declination and then a rise to 60 in the final decade. Seafood consumption was
also
increased,
but
only
slightly
from 18 to 20 kilograms in this period.
In contrast
, meat consumption reached a peak in the late
1970’s
at 120 kilograms,
but
then fell steady to
lowest
point of 80 kilograms in 1999.
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