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The given bar graph illustrates ratio of rented accommodation and owned households in England and wales during year 1918 and 2011.

The given bar graph illustrates ratio of rented accommodation and owned households in England and wales during year 1918 and 2011. o5GR3
The given bar graph illustrates ratio of rented accommodation and owned households in England and wales during year 1918 and 2011. Overall It can clearly have observed that percentage of household rent accommodation is the largest in 1918 followed by 1939. However in same year there was least percentage of accommodation which is owned. Furthermore, the most accommodation of owned house has noted in year 2001. In addition there is also similarity observed for these two accommodations in 1971. In the beginning in year 1918 the households in rent accommodation reached its highest value which is 75% but after that this rent system start declining gradually and in year 2001 there was least percentage of own house accommodation which was nearly 32%. In case of households in rent accommodation as time get changed the percentage has increased dramatically such that In the 1918 it was 21% while in 2001 it was close to 70%. The graph also describe similarities in year 1971 for both accommodation and it was 50%. Likewise, in year 1961 and 1981 there was 40 percentage of owned house and rented accommodation.
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bar graph illustrates ratio of rented
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accommodation
and
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owned
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households
in England and wales during
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year
1918 and 2011.

Overall
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clearly
have observed that
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percentage
of
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household
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rent
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accommodation
is the largest in 1918 followed by 1939.
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However
in same
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year
there was
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least
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percentage
of
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accommodation
which is
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owned
.
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, the most
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accommodation
of
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owned
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house
has noted in
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year
2001. In
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addition
there is
also
similarity observed for these two accommodations in 1971.

In the beginning in
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year
1918 the
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households
in
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rent
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accommodation
reached its highest value which is 75%
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but
after that this
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rent
system
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start
declining
gradually
and in
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year
2001 there was
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least
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percentage
of
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own
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house
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accommodation
which was
nearly
32%.
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In
case of
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households
in
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rent
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accommodation
as time
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get
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changed
the
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percentage
has increased
dramatically
such that In the 1918 it was 21% while in 2001 it was close to 70%.

The graph
also
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describe
similarities in
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year
1971 for both
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accommodation
and it was 50%.
Likewise
, in
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year
1961 and 1981 there was 40
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percentage
of
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owned
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house
and rented
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accommodation
.
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IELTS academic The given bar graph illustrates ratio of rented accommodation and owned households in England and wales during year 1918 and 2011.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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