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bar chart below show the type of music albums purchased by people in Britain.

bar chart below show the type of music albums purchased by people in Britain. a7Pyd
The following bar graphs illustrate the characters of music albums purchased data, by individuals in Britain. Overall, both bar graphs depicts two types of music albums expenditure such as Pop music and Rock music. Calibration of people who by music albums is in percentage. Rock music is more popular in Britain than Pop music. Elderly people who are more than 45+ spend less amount on music albums. To begin with, humans from age 16 to 34 spends more on Pop music that is more than 30%. Afterwards, male and people of age group 35 to 44 spend nearly 28% to 26% respectively. Moreover, 45+ individuals spend around 10% money on Pop music albums. Secondly, expenditure of Rock music by British is more than Pop music. Youngsters spend more than 30% on Rock music. Furthermore, 16 to 24, male and 35 to 44 age groups purchased below 28%. Additionally, it is noticeable that in both types of music, 45+ aged individuals are less interested in purchasing.
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data, by individuals in Britain.

Overall
, both bar graphs depicts two types of
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music
albums expenditure such as Pop
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and
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Rock
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music
. Calibration of
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who by
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albums is in percentage.
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Rock
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is more popular in Britain than Pop
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music
. Elderly
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who are more than 45+
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less amount on
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To
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with, humans from age 16 to 34
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more on Pop
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that is
more than 30%. Afterwards, male and
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of age group 35 to 44
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nearly
28% to 26%
respectively
.
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, 45+ individuals
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around 10% money on Pop
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albums.

Secondly
, expenditure of
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Rock
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by British is more than Pop
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music
. Youngsters
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spend
more than 30% on
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Rock
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music
.
Furthermore
, 16 to 24, male and 35 to 44 age groups
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purchased
below 28%.
Additionally
, it is noticeable that in both types of
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, 45+ aged individuals are less interested in purchasing.
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