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The line graph shows the figure ( in thousands) for imprisonment in four counties between 1930 and 1980.

The line graph shows the figure ( in thousands) for imprisonment in four counties between 1930 and 1980. k6p3M
The provided line graph illustrates the number of Prisoners in four different countries ( Britain, Australia, United States and Canada) from 1930 to 1980. Overall, it is apparent that the United States had the highest number of prisoners in 1930 while Great Britain had the least number of prisoners. To begin with there was a dramatically increase in the number of prisoners is in United State. In 1930, it was 100 thousand and then reached a peack of nearly 140 thousands. The figure of United State was higher almost all the time period. The number of prisoners in Canada decreased sharply from 120 thousands to around 90 thousands between 1930 and 1980. On the other hand, Great Britain saw significant rise in the number of prisons from 1930 to 1980. In 1930, which accounted for the smallest about 30 thousands before reaching the highest marked at over 80 thousands in 1980. The figure for the prisoners population in Australia followed the fluctuate trend over the period. In 1970, the number of prisoners in Great Britain Australia was the same at around 65 thousands.
The provided line graph illustrates the
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had the highest
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. In 1930, it was 100 thousand and then reached a
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in Canada decreased
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in Great Britain Australia was the same at around 65 thousands.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the figure ( in thousands) for imprisonment in four counties between 1930 and 1980.

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